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Remember the idea I had to write an entire short story in haiku format? Well it's still something I want to do, but the second (and latest attempt) is also being scrapped. I need to work out a solid story before I begin and I didn't really know where I was going with this one so . . . I don't really think I can work on it anymore. Maybe I'll change my mind if you have ideas??
Here it is, if your curious. I don't know if it's particularly good, but it is something.
SpoilerThe tree is rotting.
The corruption spreads outward.
Hidden by the leaves.
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The doctor arrived,
on her coronation day.
The staff was displeased.
Why was he so late?
There were just a few hours left.
Soon, she would be queen.
Her curse could not stay.
It needed to be lifted.
So, the doctor came.
They showed him through
To the cursed Princess’ rooms.
Tall, bright, and ornate.
Before entering,
The lady’s maid came to ‘explain’.
“The curse isn’t simple,”
“We don’t understand,”
“Some of the things that happen . . .”
“It’s unexplainable.”
The doctor sighed heavily.
He would need to know more.
“. . . How unfortunate.”
“Indeed,” the maid replied.
“Perhaps meeting her will help.”
She gestured forward.
They passed through gold doors,
And followed velvet carpet.
Swallowed by thick tapestry.
Her room was dimly lit.
Candles made gold accents glow.
Chairs dripped jewels and silks.
She sat at a table.
Drowning in a plush, blue gown.
Her eyes were distant.
“The tree is rotting.”
She mumbled to the shadows.
“. . . I feel like rotting.”
“Lady Caroline?”
The maid inquired, unshaken.
“You're awake so early?”
The doctor stayed quiet.
He checked his watch--2 PM.
Not early for him.
“Lady Caroline?”
The Lady’s maid asked again.
“The Doctor is here.”
“Go away,” she mumbled.
The doors to her room opened.
No one had touched them.
“Don’t be silly dear.”
The maid slowly approached her.
“The Doctor will help.”
“He can’t do anything,”
Caroline insisted, curt.
“I don’t want him too.”
The doctor moved over,
And put his hands on the table.
“Do you often feel sick?”
“No.” Caroline said.
“Don’t you ignore what I said!”
“I don’t want you here.”
“I’m afraid I’m needed.”
The table shifted away,
Out from under him.
“Lady Caroline!”The maid scolded her quickly.
“You're terribly rude!”
“Well, I don’t feel sick!”
“I’m fine, so he can leave now.”
She stared at the floor.
Dialogue is really difficult, so next time I might try something that has less speaking and is more focused on narrative. We'll see
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it absolutely is a pain lol . . . there's a reason why I've had 2 unsuccessful attempts.
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I LOVE IT SO FAR OH MY CHASMS
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lol thanks
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LETSSS GOOOOOOO
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Bro
Like food tho
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lol I did end up going cause I was too hungry so you are very correct
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Good choice
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Not sure, but I think my school has changed their blocking system so I won't be able to access the Shard while I'm there . . .
Guess I'll find out in a bit lol
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Yeah it's weird I'm not sure how it gets through (because they block another forum that I'm on but not this one)
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my school blocks it sometimes but not if i use certain loopholes it’s really weird
but i never visit the site during school anymore because our teachers can see our computer screens during class and remotely manage them
which means close tabs and stuff and read everything we’re looking at
i hate it so much
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Ooof
I think my teachers can also watch are screens but they never actually do it, y'know?
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The real question is, do I get all dressed up for first day of senior year OR do I just where pajamas
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DRESS UP!!
then wear pajamas the second day
(if you’re like me and have A day B days then you basically get two first days)
(also why do Wednesdays start late?)
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I gave up on pajama days in fifth grade.
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WAIT EDDIE I DO HAVE AN A/B SCHEDULE THAT'S BRILLIANT!!
(also too late for today guys, I ended up having the energy to dress up)
((also weird but I don't own a onesie, unfortunately))
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I made a good reads account . . . not sure if that was good idea BUT i want somewhere to write rant reviews because I enjoy complaining.
anyone else there? Who want to be friends? Maybe?
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I ADDED YOU
YAAAAAAAY
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wait I love the notification that you are now my friend
that’s so fun
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Yaaay!!!
hehe
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Unpopular reading opinion:
'Brooding' is like, an adjective ya'll.
A verb even. (to 'brood')
Something that people do. At certain times. When it's appropriate.
It's not someone's entire personality!!
And it certainly doesn't make a love interest more attractive.
SpoilerFriendliness and emotional intelligence is far more attractive imo
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lol it sounds like someone’s been reading a bit too much fanfiction written by 8 year olds
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No I'm not and that's the problem! This are professionally published books . . .
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that’s depressing
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